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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

#people #health #alternative #medicines #treatments #doctor #development
In recent times, an increasing figure of
individuals
 with health-related issues are relying on other methods of
drugs
 and treatments
such
 as herbals in place of going to consult their health expert
in
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as much as these herbals and
treatment
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treatments
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 tend to be helpful at times, it is a negative development as these
drugs
lack
dosage
, the manufacturers of them
lack
 adequate knowledge and these facilities
lack
necessary
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 equipment.
To begin
 with,
Orthodox
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 method of treating illnesses and drug supply has many dangers attached to them in as much as they tend to be affordable. These dangers can be
as a result
 of
firstly
,
lack
 of
dosage
 prescription.
Due to
this
 situation, humans are left with no other option than to take over or
under
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dosage
 of them which can lead to serious conditions and even death. It is
also
 seen that
in
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most of these
drugs
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 they
lack
pamphlet
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pamphlets
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 where necessary
informations
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such
 as
in
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the drug
dosage
, dates of production and expiry date are written.
Secondly
, it is observed that those who carry out these treatments or even produced these
drugs
has
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 little or no knowledge about what they are doing because they did not attend schools for them, they tend to carry out
guess work
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, using the lives of human to do trial and error.
Lastly
, these
treatments
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 areas are likely not to have
necessary
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the necessary
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equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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 to carry out a particular task thereby endangering the lives of
individuals
.
For instance
, the traditional bone
setter's
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 (TBA) are
individuals
 who
tries
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 to manipulate the bone under
blind
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 setting.
As a result
 of
lack
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 of instruments
such
 as
x-ray
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machines
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 these
individuals
 have cost a lot of complications in our present time and country putting
individuals
 at
the
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risk of losing their hands
legs
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 and at some point resulting
to
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 death. To sum it up,
in
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as much as people have little or no money to go to good health facilities and buy good
drugs
, the little they have should be used well by going to go to hospitals which the government has made free in other to avoid abusing of
drugs
 and being attended to by quacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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