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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatment instead of visiting their usual doctor. do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In recent times, are increasing figure of individuals with health-related issues are trying other methods of
drugs
 and treatments
such
 as herbal in place of going to
consult
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 their health expert. In as much as
this
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these
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 herbs and
treatment
 options tend to be helpful
atimes
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times
at times
, it is a negative development as
this
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these
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drugs
 lack prescription, the manufacturers of them have little or no adequate knowledge and
also
a
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apply
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treatment
 areas do not have
necessary
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 equipment.
To begin
 with, the Orthodox method of treating illness and drug supply has many dangers attached to them in as much as they tend to be affordable.
This dangers
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 can be
as
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a result of
first,
lack
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 of proper dosage information. Human beings at
this
 point are left with no other option than to take over or under those of them which can lead to various conditions and even death.
Secondly
, it is observed that those who carry out
this
treatment
 or even produce these
drugs
 have little or no knowledge about what they are doing because they did not attend schools for
this
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 procedures, they tend to carry out guesswork there by using the lives
off
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 humans to do trial and error.
Lastly
, these
treatment
 areas are likely not to have the necessary equipment to carry out
a particular tasks
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 thereby endangering the lives of humans.
For instance
, the traditional bone setters are individuals who try to manipulate the bone under a blind setting
as a result
 of
lack
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 of instruments
such
 as X-ray
machine
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machines
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. These people have cost a lot of complications in our present time and country, putting individuals at risk of losing their hands and legs and at some point resulting
to
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in
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 death. To sum it up, in as much as people have little or no money to go to good health facilities and buy good
drugs
, the little they have should be used properly by going to good hospitals which the government has made free to avoid abusing
of
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drugs
 and being attended to by quacks.
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