The increase in food production owes much to fertilizers and better machinery, but some people think that it has a negative impact on human health and community. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many individuals argue that food industries are making noise

due to

use

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the use

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of fertilizers but these are dangerous for human beings. The

arguement

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argument

is true and I will agree with

this

. First and foremost, the owners of different industries are looking for cheap land for their business so that, they move towards residential areas where the people are living their healthy life.

However

, they move there and install their instruments for food production with different sources even these sources

has

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bad odour which harms one's life.

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, in Pakistan even in my city, the bricks factories are making too

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much polution

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polution arround

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pollution around

residential areas.

Due to

this

, we face warm conditions in our city.

On the other hand

, machinery

are

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also

income for dirt particles. Individuals who are facing

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apply

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asthma

also

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are also

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conscious of the bad impacts of dirt particles.

Moreover

, some landlords who have

huge

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a huge

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amount of land with

wheat

, they are doing business using

wheat

production.

Wheat

income

also

contains different fertilizers which can be harmful for humans.

However

, harvesting is more

disaster

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disastrous

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than planting

wheat

. The process of harvesting involves filtering seeds from long leaves which can be done using

machine

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a machine

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called thresher. The steps of

filteration

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filtration

outcomes

large

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a large

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number of dust particles in

air

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the air

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which

effect

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affect

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patients who are suffering from air allergies.

Like in

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our country, allergy

cause

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caused

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by air

polution

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pollution

has

high

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a high

the high

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number of counts.

To conclude

, Food production

industuries

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industries

owners should ensure to run their

business

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businesses

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commertial

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commercial

areas even if the lands are expensive. But

this

will save humans from various infections and diseases.

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