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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
It is true that the prevailing growth of online marketplaces will end up closing
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the conventional brick-and-mortar shops in our cities. I completely agree with
this
 statement as I witness day-to-day improvement in
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digital marketing.
This
 type of distant marketing provides convenience to
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people
 as they spend most of
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time
 online and their
time
 is worth more than anything.
This
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traditional marketing.
Firstly
, nowadays, most
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individuals spend more
time
 online, and it is very convenient for them to order materials through online sites. Nowadays, most
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companies showcase their
products
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 their websites and,
therefore
 it is very easy for the consumer to go through the sites and find the appropriate
products
while
 sitting at their home.
This
 facility is not available
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conventional malls and supermarkets.
For example
, the big tech Amazon can manifest a wide variety of electronic
products
 available in China, and individuals sitting in Brazil can find
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them
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 and order them through
Amazon
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 site. In the absence of online
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people
 must visit China to explore the
products
.
Hence
 digital marketing has more privileges since more choices are available as far as
products
 are concerned.
Secondly
, in
this
 modern era,
people
 value
time
 since each second costs
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them. Nowadays, companies hire
people
 on
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 basis and employers are keen to check whether the work will be completed within
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time
.
Also
, employees want to spend their valuable hours on their work rather than wasting
time
 in supermarkets.
Also
,
people
 get their
favorite
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 groceries with a few clicks through online delivery apps like Uber. By not wasting their
time
 on the hassles of going and searching in supermarkets,
people
 get more
time
 to spend
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 career
as well as
 other amusement activities.
To conclude
, online marketing has more benefits than
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conventional shopping which demands visiting brick-and-mortar shops.
Due to
 these benefits
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people
 are more into different types of digital marketing which leads to
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 of traditional shopping centres.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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