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Some people say that ' success is 10 percent talent and 90 percent hard work' is hard work the key to success or is talent also important?

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I think that many people
who
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want to be successful in the
world
.Some people say that
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success
 is more important than hard
working
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work
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.
However
 ,in my opinion
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hard
working
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work
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 is the main key to success.I completely agree 10
percent
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talent
 and 90
percent
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 hard
work
. In my own view that if you have a
talent
 but do not
work
 hard you can not show your real
talent
 to the
world
.
For example
, Tomas Edison tried a thousand times to invent a light bulb .He failed 999 times,but he did not give up and kept trying.
Finally
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 he invented the light bulb .Or Elon Musk is the richest businessman in the
world
.He
also
 became the richest man in the
world
due to
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work
.
On the other hand
,
however
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 there are some professions that require more
talent
 than hard
work
.
For instance
,singers,painters,actors and so on. If they have no natural born
talent
, they will not
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succeed
success
 in their chosen profession even if they
work
 hard. In conclusion
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I think that everyone will be successful in their chosen job if they like it .If people don't
work
 hard in their chosen professions,they will not be successful
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