IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The world of work is rapidly changing and employees cannot depend on having the same job or the same working conditions for life. Discuss the possible causes and suggest ways to prepare people to work in the future. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

#world #work #employees #job #conditions #life #people #future
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Revolution in
technology
 and science has changed the world of business significantly. Demand for new jobs is increasing
while
 others are disappearing.
This
 essay will discuss the causes of
this
 era and how to prepare the new generation to determine these changes. It is undoubtedly true that because of new ,
technology
 our lives are affected in many ways.
For example
, Online banking is expected to replace current banking which
subsequently
 will result in a reduction in the workforce in
this
 sector.
Moreover
, the fresh graduates who studied subjects related to
this
 sector will struggle to find jobs.
Technology
 has revolutionized people's lives,
therefore
 governments should act
accordingly
 by acknowledging the importance of implementing the new
technology
 in the education system. Nowadays,
Technology
 allows us to learn new things and develop ourselves. Online courses are available more than ever before and online teaching was the only solution during the pandemic.
Furthermore
, online meetings in the world of work are proven to be very practical and save time. Unfortunately, many peoples use the internet just for social media because they don't know what else they can do.
This
 is why I suggest an educational programme for the old generation to teach them how to make extra income from the Internet by sharing their experience with university students. In conclusion,
Technology
 has revolutionised our lives and
this
 has changed our education system and people's preconception about work. People should be aware of all these changes and upgrade themselves and have multiple skills in order to be able to take maximum advantage.
Submitted by eldowi74 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: