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the diagram shows the recyling process of aluminium cans summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the diagram shows the recyling process of aluminium cans summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Depicted in the given diagram is the process of recycling
aluminium
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cans
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. There are several steps
untill
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until
cans
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ca
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can
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 be reused. These procedures are divided into collecting, recycling and producing processes.
Firstly
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, the
veluable
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valuable
 waste
such
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 as
aluminium
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cans
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 should
put
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in
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particular
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a particular
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 trash bin in order to ease
collection
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the collection
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 process. After that, the collector transports the
cans
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 to the
recycle
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 factory with
truck
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the truck
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. Once in the factory, the
cans
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 are cleaned, sorted, shredded, and compressed by using
recycling
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a recycling
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 machine. Once
this
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 has
complited
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completed
, the
cans
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 are ready to be entered
in
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into
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 the heating and melting processes. In
this
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 stage, the
aluminium
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cans
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 will be melted, and it changes to liquid form.
The
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last
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 step, the liquid
aluminium
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 is shaped to the rolling form with
thickness
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a thickness
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 between 2,5 mm and 6 mm.
Moreover
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, the
aluminium
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 rolls are
molded
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moulded
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 into
bottle
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bottles
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 and
cans
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. The recycled
cans
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 can be reused for
comercial
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commercial
 products. The UK has
succed
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succeed
recyclling
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recycling
cans
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, and they use 74%
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cans
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of cans
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 recycled in their
bevarage
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beverage
cans
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 output.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words aluminium, cans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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