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The bart chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The bart chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
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The bar chart provides information about the mean expenditure that households spent in a week for a
50 year
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 span from 1968 to 2018, measured in percentage.
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, it is noticeable that the most
expense
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 was for
food
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 consumption with the least for
fuel
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 and
power
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 purposes in 1968.
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, in 2018, the expenditure was dominant for leisure activities and less significant for
fuel
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 and
power
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 usage.
According to
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 the bar chart data, it showed that
food
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 consumption showed the highest spending
while
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fuel
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 and
power
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 exhibited the least dominance in 1968. In the year 1968, nearly 40% of expenditure was used for
food
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 needs, more than three times higher than those for housing, clothing, and footwear spending in that year, which only accounted for one in ten
in
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each spending.
In contrast
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,
fuel
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 and
power
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 were the least in spending at only around 7%, slightly lower than clothing and footwear expenditures. Turning to 2018, families dominantly use their income for leisure activities with the least for personal goods,
fuel
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, and
power
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 items. The proportion of money spent
for
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 leisure activities was about 23%, followed by housing and
food
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 spending at around 18% and 17%, respectively.
Conversely
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, personal goods only used just above 5%
from
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of
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 total spending in a week,
same
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the same
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 as
fuel
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 and
power
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 expenses in 2018.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, fuel, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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