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The maps give the information about the change in Youngsville, New Zealand between 1980 and 2005.

The maps give the information about the change in Youngsville, New Zealand between 1980 and 2005.
The maps give
the
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apply
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information about the change in Youngsville, New Zealand between 1980 and 2005.
Overall
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, it can be seen that there is a big change over 25 years. The natural woods were replaced by industrial
building
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buildings
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 and public places The most noticeable point was that all the trees in the south of the
River
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 Alanah were chopped down. It was replaced by modern buildings. The houses along the railway line were demolished and transformed into a new way for skyscrapers. The new industrial zone, including warehouses and factories
were
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sprung up around
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the school
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school
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schools
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 and
airport
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the airport
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 - which still remain.
However
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, the trees in the North of the
river
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 were seen unchanged. The hospital building and the large lake remained the same. A new park nearby the
river
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 and a large stadium in the North-East corner of the lake were built to replace the previous residential area.
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, the Marina was constructed as the mouth of the
river
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 to the sea.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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