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In many part of the world, there are now multi-generational households, e.g. where grandparents live with parents and children, than in the past. What do you think are the reasons for this? DO you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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In the modern world, there is a trend that more and more families
becoming
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a
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multi-generational households than in the past.
Overall
, I think there are two main reasons
help
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 to develop
this
 phenomenon and could lead to both positive and negative effects. To illustrate, the high cost of living and rental could be the reasons that people choose to live together but not
seperate
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separate
 and possess their own houses.
Due to
 inflation around the world, it is considered that people generally need to pay more to buy
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 same thing than in the past,
this
 situation does not only happen on daily groceries but
also
 on house rental and utility bills.
However
, most
of
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people
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the people
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 still get
same
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 or similar level of payment, which somehow
worsen
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 the situation and put
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the publics
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publics
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 in
to
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a dilemma.
On the other hand
, the phenomenon of living together can have both
advantage
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advantages
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 and drawbacks to citizens.
Firstly
, it could be
more easy
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 for a family to connect and maintain their relationship when the members live together. Since they now share the same place to live, they have much more time to spend together and maintain or even enhance the
harmonious
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 in the flat.
However
, the biggest drawback could be the concern of privacy. Nowadays, human beings are
more
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pursuing freedom and their own privacy, but the fact of living together means there
are
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 less space for an individual,
hence
, a person may feel uncomfortable or even increase the chance of having fights or arguments.
To conclude
,
multi-generational
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the multi-generational
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 living structure is an
irresistable
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irresistible
 global trend. The reason behind it could be other social issues, and it has both positive and negative effects
to
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on
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socialties
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societies
social ties
.
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