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More and more people are using the internet to contact existing friends and even make new friends. Some people are of the opinion that this has strengthened relationships between existing friends, whilst others think the opposite is true. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #internet #contact #friends #relationships #whilst
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INTRODUCTION: Now a days many
people
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 are using mobiles. It is good gargate to connect
people
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 very easy way. Where ever your and family members you can connect. PARAGRAPH 1: Like most of the members are using social
media
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 like Facebook, Instagram, Snapchat, WhatsApp, Twitter there are so many social
media
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 site to connect with more and more
people
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 by creating of your personal accounts on social
media
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. It's a good thing that we are connecting with our old
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 new friends will be adding in the list. PARAGRAPH 2: So times it will create a good impact and some times it will leave the bad things in some one's life. The
people
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 are connecting and
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 shareing there information each other.some times it is going in positive way. Sometimes it will create a negative effect for life. It will spoil your life. PARAGRAPH 3: It's a good thing that we will connect with different culture
people
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. It will explore your knowledge by the friends in social
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. But in a negative way we don't about eachother better don't not share the personal information with that
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. CONCLUSION: In my perception it a good to know about
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 how the society is going on in the world. But one thing I suggest though
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 but don't share the personal details with unknown
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 it will create a bad impression on yourself.
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