The diagram shows the process of milk production

The diagram shows the process of milk production
The process diagram illustrates the steps involved in
production
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the production
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of
milk
Overall
, it can be seen that
,
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the steps by steps approach is divided into 8 categories. Starting from cows grazing to its retail to
final
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the final
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consumer in the supermarkets.
Firstly
, the cow
are
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allowed to graze on the farm which is
then
followed by
a twice daily procedures
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twice daily procedures
a twice daily procedure
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of
milk
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out their
milk
by the milking machine,
then
the
milk
is stored in a refrigerator where
its
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then
transported in a
milk
tanker daily to the diary.
Further
, from the diary, the delivered
milk
is
then
pasteurized and packaged , some are made into cheese,cream and butter which will be
finally
delivered
into
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the supermarkets and shops for sale by the final consumer
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