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Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees work from home instead of travelling to a workplace every day. Do you think the advantages of working from home outweigh disadvantages?

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Three years ago, when Coronavirus hit the globe and started an international pandemic,
people
 had no choice but to
work
 from
home
.
This
 situation raised awareness of the idea of working from
home
 and how it can sometimes be a better option than travelling to
work
 every day. I agree with
this
 opinion and believe that the advantages of working from
home
 outweigh the disadvantages. In
this
 essay, I will explain the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 topic. The first advantage of working from
home
 is the benefits for the environment. In our modern world,
people
 travel to
work
 by their own private car, which leads to traffic congestion and worse, poor air pollution. Working from
home
 will cause an improvement in air pollution in crowded cities which
consequently
 improves climate change.
Furthermore
, working from
home
 is good for mental health. Some offices can be stressful with an unhealthy environment. The pressure of being good compared to others can affect
people
 in a negative way, so I believe that working from your safe place can help your mental health. Studies have shown that throughout Covid19
people
 were calmer
while
 working since they were comfortable in their own homes and were even more beneficial since they had no interruptions or distractions from other co-workers as they experience in the office.
For example
, working on a big project with no interceptions can help finish it faster by being more focused on your assignment.
On the other hand
, one disadvantage of practising your job in a domestic environment is having technical difficulties. Working from a long-distance office forces employees to arrange video calls in order to gather a conference when there is a possibility of having poor signal or trouble connecting.
This
 problem directly affects the amount of
work
 being done and the
work
 quality.
While
 it is true that computerised problems can be a frustrating issue, I still believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of
this
 topic. In conclusion, In spite of technical difficulties being a drawback of working from
home
, in my view, the benefits of global preservation and mental health outweigh the costs.
Submitted by mayab2001 on

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