The diagram shows the stages involved in milk production.

The diagram shows the stages involved in milk production.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram shows the stages involved in milk production.
The diagram depicts the stages involved in the manufacturing of
milk
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and
it's
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its
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products.
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, the process of manufacturing contains Eight stages which are
further
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classified into two; farm processing and factory processing.
To begin
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with, Healthy cows are reared and grazed on farmlands to feed on grasses, these cows are well-fed so as to produce enough
milk
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for production. The cows are
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milked twice a day with the aid of a milking machine. After, the
milks
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milk
kinds of milk
bowls of milk
pints of milk
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are refrigerated and stored in a refrigerator at a constant temperature. These
milks
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milk
kinds of milk
bowls of milk
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are transported with a
milk
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van to the dairy daily. Moving on, after delivery to the dairy, the
milk
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is
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filtered through a filtering tank, Some are
proccessed
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processed
into cheese, cream and butter
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the filtered
milk
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is pasteurized for preservation and bottled.
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Lastly
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these packages are sent to the supermarkets and shops for final consumption.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words milk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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