The diagram shows the process by which milk-related products are produced. Summarise the information by selecting the main features. Write at least 150 word.

The diagram shows the process by which milk-related products are produced. 

Summarise the information by selecting the main features. Write at least 150 word.
The diagram reveals how
milk
and similar products are being produced in various phases and
this
involves 8 phases from the cow in the farm till the
milk
is extracted and packaged till it gets to the final consumer.
Overall
, there are different laps of cream production both on the farm and factory. these stages are 8. The cream and buttermilk products are extracted from the cows after being well-fed on the farm, and the milking is done by extracting
this
milk
through milking machines every day they are
subsequently
stored in the refrigerator at a normal temperature and
thereafter
transferred to the dairy section through the half-and-half tanker whereby delivery is done daily.
Furthermore
, Milky in the diary section is
however
converted into different products
such
as cheese, cream, and butter after pasteurization and packaging in the factory and later sent to various supermarkets and shops for sale to the final consumers.
Finally
, the production of
milk
and
and
Remove the redundancy
apply
show examples
other outcomes are achieved through the extraction of paste to pasteurization and packaging till the distribution to supermarkets and shops.
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