The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The diagram above depicts the process by which
milk related
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milk-related
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goods are manufactured, processed and sold to the public.
Overall
, there are 8
process
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processes
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illustrated in the diagram , starting from the cow's feeding on the grass to produce
milk
to be stored in the refrigerator for preservation and later transported to the diary.
Thereafter
, the
milk
is processed in the diary into various forms, like cheese, cream and butter.
Meanwhile
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some are still left as
milk
to be pasteurized for presentation and
then
packaged.
Finally
, the goods are ready after several processing and packaging to be dispensed and sold out to shops ,
supermarket
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supermarkets
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and
to
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apply
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the public.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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