People are becoming famous with the help of TV programme and the internet. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

With the expansion of the internet and digital televisions, people are easier for becoming
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popular person. There are several advantages and disadvantages
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this
very topical issue, which I will elaborate more
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. Regarding the benefits,
first,
we must admit that popularity would help increase personal
financial
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. If you were a public figure, you could open endorsement services online through your social media
such
as
instagram
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Instagram
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,
tiktok
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TikTok
or youtube channels which you have.
Therefore
, it can be said that
this
will bring new job opportunities and new professions to some people.
Second,
they will likely get
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exposure. For those who intended to have a job which
need
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popularities
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like a politician
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instance, they would be easier to be known by the
publics
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.
Moreover
, a well-known person will be more accepted when they have to go to many places across their country.
On the other hand
, the popularity will
also
give some drawbacks automatically. As a public figure, they have to
more
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aware
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their attitudes and personalities as it would be exposed. Sometimes, gossipings emerge and there is no private life anymore. More extremely, there is an inevitable negative side
effech
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effects
effect
such
as cyber-bullying.
as
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a popular person, likers and haters can not be avoided. Once we did a little mistake, they would bully us. To summarise, despite the positive effect
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very useful starting from increasing money to getting
exposures
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, without
any
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exception, it
also
lead
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some
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negative implication
such
as having no personal life and experiencing bully
for
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some netizens.
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