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Many feel that students today should learn practical skills at school such as car maintenance and managing a bank account. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern world, many people, schools and government think that practical
skills
 are good at teaching many
students
 in school ,
for example
, fixing cars and managing money.
This
 essay will discuss why they must support learning practical
skills
 in my opinion. First of all, practical
skills
 are very important for many
students
 in their real life ,because there need to use them for their work in the future
for example
, some
students
 can use fixing car
skills
 in their job.
Secondly
, because the world changes, technology is not important anymore and
students
 can search much information on the Internet
that is
 why many schools and teachers should change their teaching style.
In addition
, teaching them in managing money is important too because
students
 can plan their money in the future too.
On the other hand
, someone thinks that it is very important to teach them in
theory
 because
theory
 must important than
skills
 ,and
theory
 comes first followed by
skills
 and they think
that is
 not important to teach practical
skills
.
In contrast
, many researchers believe that teachers should teach both
theory
 and practical
skills
.
To sum up
, I totally agree that learning practical
skills
 is very positive and more beneficial for
students
 because at present practical
skills
 are important in their future and in many ,countries education is not important anymore, many
students
 prefer to go to work more than study because there think they will get more experiences more than study in the classroom and education is not everything in their life.
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