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Many feel that students today should learn practical skills at school such as car maintenance and managing a bank account. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is commonly considered by many that practical
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 like repairing cars,dealing with bank affairs and making handicrafts like knitting or even cocking, should be introduced in
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's unit
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. Regardless of the importance of theoretical curricula, I completely agree that adding some functional
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 as extracurriculars could play an important role as a booster in offspring's individual life
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.
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, considering practical
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 in
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' education lead to increasing their creativity and problem-solving abilities. In fact, theoretical curriculum generally works on one side of
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's mind,
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, studying an array of books only help them to increase their theoretical knowledge,
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, functional course materials possess a positive impact on pupils' personal and interpersonal abilities
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 as creative
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 and problem-solving abilities.
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,
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 in some of the private primary schools in Iran that have a great focus on practical
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 like cooking, painting and pottery, are more successful in different steps of their
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 as making friends and social communications in comparison with the other
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 in theoretical-based schools. Another point to consider is that having experimental extracurricular
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 at school results in, the feeling of satisfaction and well-being in future
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'
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. Owing to offspring being able to recognize their potential instincts in the practical rather than theoretical. so, they will choose the best option for their career.
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, if they can make a living from their interests
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 of choosing a profession out of compulsion. To illustrate, as far as I saw, most parents in Iran, are considerably sensible about
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's theoretical materials' marks
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 as Maths, Biology and Physics. And they force
children
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 to continue their higher education in these subjects.
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, they are not usually satisfied with their career and work
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.
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, even though theoretical course materials are determining the level of
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' literacy, I personally believe that the necessity of practical course units in offspring's
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 cannot be ignored.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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