It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

In today’s world, it is believed that children should learn the
difference
between good and bad, especially at that age.
punishment
is required to teach them
this
important skill, which is knowing the
difference
between good and bad. I personally disagree with
this
point of view and firmly believe that
punishment
has more disadvantages than advantages. but if
punishment
must be used occasionally, I think it’s better to not do it physically but simply do something that doesn’t harm the kids in a bad
way
and teach them the
difference
between good and bad like not buying a toy they like temporarily. On the one hand, people who believe
punishment
is necessary, say that it was the main
way
of teaching kids the
difference
between
right
and wrong in the past and it may be the best
way
of teaching children nowadays too.
For example
, parents and schools used to punish kids who did something wrong in order to teach them what was good and they were somehow successful in that, so today it might be necessary to continue
this
trend.
On the other hand
, others believe that
punishment
isn’t a good
way
of teaching
right
and wrong because it involves anger and that kid won’t forget it in the future,
Thus
this
way
is morally wrong. They suggest the best
way
of teaching moral values is by talking to a kid and taking him or her to visit specialized persons who can teach them the
difference
between
right
and wrong without
punishment
, and
this
has been shown to be the best
way
of teaching children
right
and wrong .
For instance
, I was taken to some sessions with a kid’s therapist and was taught the
difference
between
right
and wrong and so far I’m pretty good at determining the
difference
between those two,
whereas
no
punishment
was involved.
To sum up
, I firmly hold the opinion that teaching
right
and wrong needs to be done by some specialized person, and it is completely wrong to use
punishment
as a tool for that.
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  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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