It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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In today’s world, it is believed that children should learn the

difference

between good and bad, especially at that age.

punishment

is required to teach them

this

important skill, which is knowing the

difference

between good and bad. I personally disagree with

this

point of view and firmly believe that

punishment

has more disadvantages than advantages. but if

punishment

must be used occasionally, I think it’s better to not do it physically but simply do something that doesn’t harm the kids in a bad

way

and teach them the

difference

between good and bad like not buying a toy they like temporarily. On the one hand, people who believe

punishment

is necessary, say that it was the main

way

of teaching kids the

difference

between

right

and wrong in the past and it may be the best

way

of teaching children nowadays too.

For example

, parents and schools used to punish kids who did something wrong in order to teach them what was good and they were somehow successful in that, so today it might be necessary to continue

this

trend.

On the other hand

, others believe that

punishment

isn’t a good

way

of teaching

right

and wrong because it involves anger and that kid won’t forget it in the future,

Thus

this

way

is morally wrong. They suggest the best

way

of teaching moral values is by talking to a kid and taking him or her to visit specialized persons who can teach them the

difference

between

right

and wrong without

punishment

, and

this

has been shown to be the best

way

of teaching children

right

and wrong .

For instance

, I was taken to some sessions with a kid’s therapist and was taught the

difference

between

right

and wrong and so far I’m pretty good at determining the

difference

between those two,

whereas

punishment

was involved.

To sum up

, I firmly hold the opinion that teaching

right

and wrong needs to be done by some specialized person, and it is completely wrong to use

punishment

as a tool for that.

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Topic Vocabulary:

punishment
positive reinforcement
consequences
time-outs
removal of privileges
open communication
clear expectations
consistency
fairness
disciplinary action
proportionate
moral values
internalization

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