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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides the
numbers
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number
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 of
tourists
 visiting a
caribbean
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Caribbean
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island
, from the year
of
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apply
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2010
till
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to
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 2017.
Overall
, the
number
 of
tourists
 increased substantially from 1
million
tourists
 in 2010 to 3.5
million
tourists
 in 2017. Between 2010 and 2012 the
number
 of
tourists
, the total
number
 of
tourists
 increased from 1
million
 to 1.5
million
tourists
.Nearly 75% of the
tourists
 preferred to
Staying
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Stay
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 on
island
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the island
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 compared to nearly 25%
preferred
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who preferred
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 to stay on the cruise in 2010.
However
, the
numbers
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number
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 of
visitors
stayed
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who stayed
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 on cruise increased in 2011, it decreased in 2012.
While
 the
numbers
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number
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 of
visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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 kept flat between 2010 and 2011 it increased in 2012. From 2013 to 2015, Despite the
number
 of
visitors
 staying on the
island
 remained flat, the
numbers
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number
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 of
visitors
 staying on the cruise significantly increased from 0.5
millions
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million
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 to nearly 1.25
millions
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million
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 in 2015, And kept increasing
till
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to
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 2
millions
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million
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 in 2017.
Nevertheless
,
that
Correct word choice
apply
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the
number
 of
the
Correct article usage
apply
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visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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 decreased in 2016 it increase to 1.5
millions
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million
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 again in 2017.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers, tourists, island, number, million, visitors, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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