Some people believe that the only purposes of film is to entertain. Others say films should have educational value. Discuss both views and give own opinion.

The reading and the listening parts are about
overpopulation
and its effects. The author believes that
increasing
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of
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global population causes real problems. At the same time, the
lecturer
disagrees with
this
point of view and says that
overpopulation
is not as harmful as it is shown.
According to
the writer, the first negative effect of
overpopulation
is
extinction
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the extinction
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of hundreds of
species
because of the lack of resources. Shortly, less
freshwater
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fresh water
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and food
less
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species
that need in these.
Thus
, the future is threatened by total extinction.
However
, the man in the listening part argues that we should be
scary
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about extinction and
loose
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loss
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of
species
. He states that
due to
the
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science, we are able to maintain
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the lifes
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lifes
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lives
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of all
species
and preserve biodiversity. 
Next
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thing which is mentioned by the
lecturer
is the increase of conflicts and wars because of
overpopulation
. He thinks that the lack of resources and poverty will force people and governments to start wars to obtain better conditions and better life.
Nevertheless
, the speaker disapproves and urges that our developed technologies will manage
this
problem.
According to
his opinion, new devices can even filter the dirtiest water and make it drinkable. So we will not suffer from the lack of anything.  The
last
point was about the growth of prices, increasing the cost of living
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the whole. The writer
concerns
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that limited resources like food and water will cause
the
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huge demand.
This
will affect the whole economic system and prices too. The
lecturer
believes that again technologies and
devises
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devices
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which will be used more and more in future will be only cheaper and available for everyone. He gave an example
with
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laptops and smartphones,
that
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become cheaper every day, so
this
allow
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even poor people to buy one. 
To sum up
, the writer and the
lecturer
are passionate about their views on
overpopulation
and
disagrees
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with each other on every point.
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