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Public health is becoming an urgent issue now a days. some argue that government should create nutrition ad food choice law to improve public health while others believe that it is a matter of personal choice and responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In recent years, public health is becoming an important problem . Many
people
 said that
government
 should put laws for nutrition and
food
 to develop public health .
Whereas
 others believe that humans should know what they buy . In
this
 I essay I will discuss both sides
then
 I will move in to give my own view.
To begin
, there are drawbacks to
this
 statement .
firstly
 ,some old
people
 don'
t
 know how to read , so the
government
 has to put a law and who doesn'
t
 follow the law. They must give them a fine . Especially these days there are lots
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diseases .
Secondly
, a few companies don'
t
 care about
people
 . They want just profits from products.
However
, many
people
 have skin allergies to
food
 .
Therefore
,
people
 have to read items before buying them.
Additionally
, a lot of
people
 like unhealthy
food
such
 as chocolate and fast
food
 . The
government
 can'
t
 do anything to
people
 with
this
 product . In conclusion , if governments do not put laws. there are disadvantages to
this
 issue .
For instance
, old
people
 who can'
t
 read and
people
 who have allergic.
Although
, the
government
 can not do anything for
people
 who love unhealthy
food
. Personally, I think
government
 can not be able to remove whole bad
food
 . But they can reduce the
food
 that has more damage .
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