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Public health is becoming an urgent issue now a days. some argue that government should create nutrition ad food choice law to improve public health while others believe that it is a matter of personal choice and responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In recent years, public health is becoming an important problem . Many
people
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 said that
government
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 should put laws for nutrition and
food
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 to develop public health .
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 others believe that humans should know what they buy . In
this
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 I essay I will discuss both sides
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 I will move in to give my own view.
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, there are drawbacks to
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 statement .
firstly
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 ,some old
people
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 don'
t
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 know how to read , so the
government
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 has to put a law and who doesn'
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 follow the law. They must give them a fine . Especially these days there are lots
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diseases .
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, a few companies don'
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 care about
people
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 . They want just profits from products.
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, many
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 have skin allergies to
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 .
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,
people
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 have to read items before buying them.
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, a lot of
people
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 like unhealthy
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such
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 as chocolate and fast
food
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 . The
government
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 can'
t
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 do anything to
people
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 with
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 product . In conclusion , if governments do not put laws. there are disadvantages to
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 issue .
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, old
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 who can'
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 read and
people
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 who have allergic.
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, the
government
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 can not do anything for
people
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 who love unhealthy
food
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. Personally, I think
government
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 can not be able to remove whole bad
food
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 . But they can reduce the
food
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 that has more damage .
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