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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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The given map compares changes which took place in Grange Park from 1920 to now.
Overall
, from the figure, it can be seen that there have been many changes here since 1920 as most of the places have been modified, renovated and most places have been replaced.
To begin
 with, the fountain was located at the centre of the garden which has been replaced by the rose garden with seats surrounding it. And
also
 there were a rose garden and pond of water plant in the northwest of the map
as well as
 a café and children’s play area constructed
instead
 of them.
Moreover
, the stage for musicians and two seats have been removed and an amphitheatre has been added to host the concerts.
Finally
, the glasshouse and seats have been changed with a water feature, and the underground park has been newly added to the southeast side corner.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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