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Some people who have been in prison becomes good citizens later,and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to tenagers about the dangers of committing a crime .To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A number of past culprits have
became
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good
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man
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 after they faced
penilty
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penalty
. In my opinion, it is true that they can help other human beings
to
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not do
crime
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 because they had handled a tough time in prison.
However
, it depends on everyone's nature. First and foremost, all fingers are not equal in size. It means that every individual is not ashamed
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 his or her guilty. But to be a positive mind, those who will ensure that they will never commit
crime
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 again
they
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are very helpful
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 the nation.
For example
, a
man
 who is young and not aware of
consequences
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 of
crime
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a crime
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 will do
crime
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 whether it will be done by mistake or with
huge
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 heart. But it is possible that an old criminal can change his mind.
On the other hand
, some criminals are very handful in prison
also
, if they want to get rid of punishment.
Moreover
, They can be good
teacher
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 as well for other offenders. Like, teaching
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good lessons in custody can help to reduce
punishment
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the punishment
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 of a
man
 who is in lockup. Teaching can
also
 help to
built
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 confidence in his life. To recapitulate,
although
crime
 is a bad prefix for a
man
but
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it can help to become a successful person in his life.
In contrast
,
crime
 has
also
 some negative effects on human beings.
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