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The chart below shows the process of waste paper recycling. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The chart below shows the process of waste paper recycling. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
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The flow chart shows how waste
paper
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 is recycled.
It is clear that
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 there are six distinct stages in
this
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 process, from the initial collection of waste
paper
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 to the eventual production of usable
paper
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.
At the first stage
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 in the
paper
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 recycling process, waste
paper
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 is collected either from
paper
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 banks, where members of the public leave their used
paper
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, or directly from businesses.
This
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paper
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 is
then
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 sorted by hand and separated
according to
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 its grade, with any
paper
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that is
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 not suitable for recycling being removed.
Next,
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the graded
paper
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 is transported to a
paper
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 mill.  Stages four and five of the process both involve cleaning. The
paper
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 is cleaned and pulped, and foreign objects
such
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 as staples are taken out.
Following
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this
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, all remnants of ink and glue are removed from the
paper
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 at the de-inking stage.
Finally
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, the pulp can be processed in a
paper
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-making machine, which makes the end product: usable
paper
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paper with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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