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You are a member of an Officer's Club. A small area in the club is available for development. The President of the club has sent out an opinion survey to see what the club members feel the space should be utilized for - a library or a conference hall.

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I personally feel that the
conference
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hall
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 is a more suitable option for our officer's
club
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. Though the other choice is almost equally appealing, I would explain a couple of reasons to justify my choice.
To begin
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conference
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hall
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 will resolve our requirement to arrange community meetings which we are having once a week.
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, we can lend it to corporate meetings when there are no scheduled activities in our
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. With
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, will have appropriate space for our meetings and can generate some revenue which can be utilized for
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 development.
Additionally
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, we can use
this
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 small space for a reading room as well, so that readers of all ages can read their books peacefully on the
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 table and can provide a small cabinet to store their books.
However
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, with library generation
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revenue is less and is used only for reading books where
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 can be fulfilled as
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a reading
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 room opportunity in the
conference
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hall
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. Considering all the above points, I am of the opinion that the
conference
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hall
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 can be fit for multi-purpose and would be a more convincing choice than a library in our officer's
club
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.
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