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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In the contemporary world, there are proponents who believe that all criminals must be treated equally and should get penalized in the same way,
while
 others are of the mindset that scene of the
crime
 should be considered like the circumstances
as well as
 the motivation
while
commiting
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committing
 a
crime
 before punishing a felon.
This
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view points
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follwed
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followed
 by my opinion in detail in subsequent paragraphs. To commence with,
according to
 the rule in my country criminals are held guilty as per the particular section that has been mentioned in the republic account of the nation .
In other words
,a person should be treated
same
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 when they commit a similar
crime
 as it has been taken care of from the vintage times that the punishment that has been allocated for a particular purpose should be given.
For instance
,there was an article published by "The Tribune" , which stated that in accordance with any criminal activities , the punishment
are
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 the same for any common man
as well as
 a know celebrity.
On the contrary
,there are people who believe that the offender should be judged on the basis of circumstances and
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inspiration.
In other words
 , not all
crime
 creators are meant to do wrong to
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society intentionally,some are innocent but are influenced by wrong surroundings.To exemplify, In
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war the opponents of
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 are mostly the people of the same nation but they have different
beleifs
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beliefs
 as they follow the bad society. To recapitulate,
this
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law breakers
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 should be
suied
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used
 in
the
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similar
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while
on the other
hand
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 the culprit should
examined
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 and
then
 punished
accordingly
.From my point of
view
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 the convict should be chastened
likewise
 as rules are meant to be followed and you never know who is telling the truth.
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