The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report describing the information shown below
The chart gives information about the percentage of 5-14-year-old
boys
and girls
participating in various leisure activities in Australia.
It can be noted that all of the kids love to watch TV or videos a great deal. The least favourite leisure pursuit among girls
is skateboarding or rollerblading while
boys
favour Art and craft the least.
After watching TV and videos, three-fifth of the girls
enjoy both bike riding and playing electronic or computer games equally. Furthermore
, a bit over half of the girls
prefer art and craft. It is clearly visible that a bit less than a third of the proportion participate in skateboarding or rollerblading,
when it comes to Remove the comma
apply
girls
.
Likewise
, not just the whole proportion of boys
like watching TV and videos, a four-fifth of them play electronic or computer games as well. Moreover
, 7 in 10 boys
enjoy bike riding whereas
skateboarding or rollerblading and art and craft are equally the least preferred activities.Submitted by shwetapanchal172 on
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