The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report describing the information shown below

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The chart gives information about the percentage of 5-14-year-old

boys

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and

girls

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participating in various leisure activities in Australia. It can be noted that all of the kids love to watch TV or videos a great deal. The least favourite leisure pursuit among

girls

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is skateboarding or rollerblading

while

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boys

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favour Art and craft the least. After watching TV and videos, three-fifth of the

girls

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enjoy both bike riding and playing electronic or computer games equally.

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, a bit over half of the

girls

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prefer art and craft. It is clearly visible that a bit less than a third of the proportion participate in skateboarding or rollerblading

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when it comes to

girls

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, not just the whole proportion of

boys

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like watching TV and videos, a four-fifth of them play electronic or computer games as well.

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, 7 in 10

boys

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enjoy bike riding

whereas

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skateboarding or rollerblading and art and craft are equally the least preferred activities.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

158 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

engagement levels
leisure activities
downward trend
popularity
participation rates
comparisons
analyze
general trends
highlight
significance

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