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The maps below show the centre of a small twon called Islip is it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small twon called Islip is it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pictures illustrate the city
centre
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 of Islip today and the future for its development.
Overall
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, there are some modifications including addition and renovation in several facilities and infrastructures in a planned development. Nowadays, the northernmost of the map is the countryside, and some shops are situated in the north and the south of the main
road
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. In the
centre
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 to the south of the maps, it can be seen a housing
area
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. That location is
also
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 completed with a school in the west and a small park in the east
area
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 of the residences
,
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 and is connected with a path to the main
road
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. In the future, the Islip town
centre
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 layout is developed wider. The
centre
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 of the main
road
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 is modified by adding a dual carriageway and surrounding the city
centre
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. The shops'
area
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 in the south of the main
road
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 is unchanged
while
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 the shops which are located in the south of it are demolished and it is made into some facilities
consists
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 of the bus station, shopping
centre
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, car park, and new housing
area
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 with small path to the main
road
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. The main
road
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 on the dual carriageway is replaced to be a pedestrian path. The housing
area
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 in the south of the maps is passed by a dual carriageway and some of them are redeveloped as new housing with a smaller park. The school is relocated to the southernmost of the maps and housing remains steady there.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, road, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
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