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it has been suggested that every one in the world want to own a car, a TV and a fridge. Do you think disadvantages such development outweigh advantages?

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It is irrefutable that every
people
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 in the globe desire each thing will belong to them
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 as a car, a TV and a fridge. It has both demerits and merits. I believe that the pros outstrip the cons.
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 with,
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 owning all things has advantages, it
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 consists of some disadvantages. When each
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 has their own car , there will be a lot of cars and traffic jams on the country's streets. And
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 if
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 have own television at their home. They will only watch it and they will be lazy in the long run.
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, it is true that belonging to own cars and TV, fridges has demerits.
On the other hand
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, it has a lot of merits. When
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 possess a car , they will arrive at their destinations faster without any waiting.
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, if a person owns a fridge, he or she will put anything in it. In conclusion, Owning to all things has both upsides and downsides, but the benefits outweigh its drawbacks.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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