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University should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or dissgree?

#university #numbers #students #dissgree
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Universities and
schools
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 are the places which help to make a bright future
of
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 any nation by educating the people residing there. Some people support the idea of same number of boys and girls in every class. I totally disagree with
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 said notion and In
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 essay, I will support my opinion with relevant examples. To commence with, dividing a class
in
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 equal
number
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numbers
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 of male and female
students
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 can be unfair for some learners. What I mean by saying
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 is that some
students
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 might not get a seat in their favourite subject class.
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, medical is mostly preferable by girls and the male
learners
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learner's
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 seats could be wasted in
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 subject which can be used by female
students
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 who are really interested in it.
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, many nations have less population of
womens
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women
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compare
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 to
mens
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men
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. In
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 type of nationality,
this
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 idea of equal division would be inappropriate.
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, many parts of
india
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India
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 have almost double
male
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the male
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 learners
compare
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 to females in
schools
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.
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,
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 can be proved beneficial in promoting girl child education in
the
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apply
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countries where girls are still not allowed to go to
the
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apply
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learning institutes .In order to
fulfill
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 the seats,
schools
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 will automatically make the
efforts
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effort
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 to aware people to admit their girl child to
schools
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.
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,
this
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 approach of equal numbers of
students
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 of both genders is not helpful
due to
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 the unfairness and less population of
womens
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women
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 in some countries.
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however
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However
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,
itis
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it is
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 a good step for encouraging girl child education in developing nations.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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