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University should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or dissgree?

#university #numbers #students #dissgree
Universities and
schools
 are the places which help to make a bright future
of
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 any nation by educating the people residing there. Some people support the idea of same number of boys and girls in every class. I totally disagree with
this
 said notion and In
this
 essay, I will support my opinion with relevant examples. To commence with, dividing a class
in
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 equal
number
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numbers
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 of male and female
students
 can be unfair for some learners. What I mean by saying
this
 is that some
students
 might not get a seat in their favourite subject class.
For instance
, medical is mostly preferable by girls and the male
learners
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learner's
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 seats could be wasted in
this
 subject which can be used by female
students
 who are really interested in it.
Furthermore
, many nations have less population of
womens
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women
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compare
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 to
mens
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men
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. In
this
 type of nationality,
this
 idea of equal division would be inappropriate.
For example
, many parts of
india
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 have almost double
male
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 learners
compare
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 to females in
schools
.
On the other hand
,
this
 can be proved beneficial in promoting girl child education in
the
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countries where girls are still not allowed to go to
the
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learning institutes .In order to
fulfill
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 the seats,
schools
 will automatically make the
efforts
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 to aware people to admit their girl child to
schools
.
To conclude
,
this
 approach of equal numbers of
students
 of both genders is not helpful
due to
 the unfairness and less population of
womens
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women
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 in some countries.
however
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,
itis
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it is
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 a good step for encouraging girl child education in developing nations.
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