In some countries, girls and boys are studied in different schools rather than in the same schools. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of this.

There are different views about how
girls
and
boys
should be separated or not in
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school. Each
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view
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have its own advantages and disadvantages. Let me explain about the advantages and disadvantages of
girls
and
boys
are
studied
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in different
schools
rather than in the same
schools
.
First,
there are some advantages of
girls
and
boys
are studied in different
schools
. In some countries that are
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, there are some
societies
that practice strict rules about male and female
relationship
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relationships
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based on
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the muslim
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muslim
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Muslim
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point of view. One of the rules is male is strictly prohibited to contact
with
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other females that have
not
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no
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family or marriage relations, and vice versa, to control their sexual
desire
. To implement that rule, some
societies
make different
schools
for men and women to minimize their contact. For that
societies
,
this
condition is an advantage for them, so they can teach their children to follow the rule. The other advantage is to minimize the sexual
harrassment
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harassment
. If
girls
and
boys
are situated in the same
schools
, they will
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be attracted
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to each other. The attraction
lead
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to
the
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love and sexual
desire
to
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each
others
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. If they still follow the norms, they will behave to express their feelings and desires. But, in many cases, some people don't have
that
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manner
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manners
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to follow the norms. The consequence is they do
the
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unmanner
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unmanned
things,
such
as catcalling, sexual
harrasments
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harassment
harassments
, or even
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. Control
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of girls
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girls
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girls'
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and
boys
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boys'
boy's
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contact in some
situation
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situations
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can reduce the sexual
harrasment
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harassment
potentials
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for both women and men. In other views,
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girls
and
boys
in different
schools
brings up some disadvantages. The
societies
as global are not ideal for each
cultures
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culture
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in the world. Each
cultures
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culture
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has
different
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point of view about
this
statement. If the
girls
and
boys
are situated in the same
schools
, the
childrens
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children
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will learn about more perspectives, as males and females have their own perspectives, even biologically
differents
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different
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between them. If they are separated, the consequence is
the
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they
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will not learn how to behave to each
others
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other
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and they will have culture shock if they
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with the opposite sex. The other disadvantage of the statement is
this
situation is increasing the chance of
same-sex
relationships in
the
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schools
. When
childrens
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children
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grow up, they will have
puberty
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phase. One of the signals is they are attracted to the opposite sex and they have sexual
desire
. In
the
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same-sex
schools
, the students don't find any opposite-sex students. In many cases, to express their sexual
desire
, they usually make
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a relationship
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with
the
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a
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same-sex
partner and do as the
adults
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adult's
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partner did. Based on the data,
same-sex
relationship is
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bigger in
this
type of
schools
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school
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.
To conclude
, each point of view
have
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different
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a different
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perspective
to
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how
girls
and
boys
should be placed in
the
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different or the same
schools
. But, in my opinion, I prefer
the
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girls
and
boys
are
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to be
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situated in the same school to increase their knowledge and behave toward the opposite-sex person in the
schools
to prepare themselves
in
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for
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the global
societies
where
male
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males
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and females don't have real boundaries in society.
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