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The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 bar chart illustrates the proportion of
citizens
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 born in and out of Australia in 1995 and 2010. Those
citizens
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 live in urban, suburban, and countryside
areas
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.
Overall
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, in the given time frame, there is a noticeable increase of
citizens
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 living in cities,
whereas
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, the number of
citizens
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 living in towns and rural
areas
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 declined substantially. The proportion of
citizens
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 of cities that were born in Australia grew from about 50% to just over 60%.
While
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 Australians outside born grew considerably from 60% to 80%.
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, the amount of born in
citizens
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 living in towns and rural
areas
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 has decreased. In 2010, towns and rural
areas
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citizens
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 accounted for around half of the proportion in 1995.
In addition
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,
citizens
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 of cities that born outside Australia were rose rapidly from just over 60% to 80%. Surprisingly, the
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citizens
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number of citizens
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 of rural
areas
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 fell dramatically from 40% to nearly less than 10%.
Citizens
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 of rural
areas
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 followed a similar pattern. It plummeted slightly from about 10% to less than 10%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words citizens, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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