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Some people believe that students should acquire working experience during their gap year instead of traveling. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #students #gap #year
Without any doubt,
to have
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 a job and working after completing their professional studies is a big concern among a large number of
people
 in almost all parts of the world. In
this
respect
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 some
people
 believe that they should
work
on
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in
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 their
country
by contrast
 others say that they should decide if they want to
work
out side
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outside
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 of the
country
 or
no
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not
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. basically, I support the
fist
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first
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 view. Convincing the arguments can be made that after finishing
academic
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the academic
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 period, it is the best idea that professionals
work
 on the place or
country
 that they studied before. First of all, it will save
their
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them
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 time. To be more specific, if they want to go
another
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to another
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country
 to have a job there, it is needed that they may
lean
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learn
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 their language and it takes time, consider third world
country's
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country
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people
, most of them are able to speak and solve their problems just by their language.
Furthermore
, it will be more useful for both
worker
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workers
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 and
the
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apply
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society, to make it clearer, they have the experience of living
on
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in
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 that place and can be more beneficial
on
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to
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 that society because they will not have any information about other
countries
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countries'
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people
's academic and personal lives. Admittedly, there is some truth
with
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argument
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the argument
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 that they should be free to
work
 in another
country
 if they
interest
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, but it will be difficult for them to adapt
the
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 conditions if they don't have the experience
of
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apply
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working
on
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in
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 that
country
. All
an
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in
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 all, considering the points mentioned above, we arrive at the conclusion that working in the origin
country
 for
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an expert
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expert
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experts
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 should
be encourage
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be encouraging
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 more.
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