The table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table shows
amount
of Add an article
the amount
sales
in coffee
shop which is part of Add an article
a coffee
the coffee
office
building on weekdays.
From Add an article
an office
the office
Overall
perspective its readily apparent that 7.30 to 10.30 Correct article usage
an Overall
being
Wrong verb form
is
Correct article usage
the bussiest
bussiest
hour,Correct your spelling
busiest
while
in noon cafe got less
customers in a day.
In Change the quantifier
fewer
mornings
, Correct article usage
the mornings
pasteries
are Correct your spelling
pastries
of
high demand ,followed by Change preposition
in
coffee
,tea
,coffee
(265,110,50 respectively).
Between 10.30 and 14:50 ,Correct word choice
and coffee
people
show less interest in drinking tea
and eating pastries
as there below
100 Add a missing verb
are below
people
opting for them. The sales
of Add an article
the sandwich
a sandwich
sandwich
is four times more than Fix the agreement mistake
sandwiches
previous
hour settling with 200 Correct article usage
the previous
people
.
On the Other hand
, mid afternoon
hours there are total 145 Add a hyphen
mid-afternoon
coffee
sales
,35 tea
sales
,150 pasteries
and 40 sandwiches .
In the evenings Correct your spelling
pastries
Coffee
seems to be go to option to
200 Change preposition
for
people
,while
110 took sandwiches and there were nearly same
number of Correct article usage
the same
people
that choose to have tea
and pastries with around 75
to 80 people
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, tea, people with synonyms.
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