The table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table shows
amount
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the amount
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of
sales
in
coffee
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a coffee
the coffee
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shop which is part of
office
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an office
the office
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building on weekdays. From
Overall
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an Overall
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perspective its readily apparent that 7.30 to 10.30
being
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is
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the bussiest
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bussiest
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busiest
hour,
while
in noon cafe got
less
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fewer
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customers in a day. In
mornings
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the mornings
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,
pasteries
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pastries
are
of
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in
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high demand ,followed by
coffee
,
tea
,
coffee
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and coffee
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(265,110,50 respectively). Between 10.30 and 14:50 ,
people
show less interest in drinking
tea
and eating pastries as there
below
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are below
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100
people
opting for them. The
sales
of
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the sandwich
a sandwich
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sandwich
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sandwiches
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is four times more than
previous
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the previous
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hour settling with 200
people
.
On the Other hand
,
mid afternoon
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mid-afternoon
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hours there are total 145
coffee
sales
,35
tea
sales
,150
pasteries
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pastries
and 40 sandwiches . In the evenings
Coffee
seems to be go to option
to
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for
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200
people
,
while
110 took sandwiches and there were nearly
same
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the same
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number of
people
that choose to have
tea
and pastries with around 75 to 80
people
respectively
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, tea, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the eighth paragraph.
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