1.In some countries there are more young people choosing to enroll in work-based training instead of attending university. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays young
students
are given rage
of variety opportunities to start their professional life, they can choose between Correct your spelling
range
go
straight to Wrong verb form
going
the
Correct article usage
apply
university
or invest
in Wrong verb form
investing
gain
professional skills. In my Wrong verb form
gaining
opinion
both decisions are advantageous for the person.
First is important to mention that, the decision Add a comma
,opinion
of
do Change preposition
to
apprenticeship
or apply for Add an article
an apprenticeship
university
depends of
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on
variety
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various
reasons
, Change preposition
of reasons
such
: (i) personally
goals, (ii) the professional area that the person decided to Change the word
personal
went
, most of the time young Change the verb
go
students
do not have sure about their intentions of pursue determinate
field, so Add an article
the determinate
enroll
in vocational training will provide them Change the spelling
enrol
the
opportunity to Add the preposition
with the
gain
some knowledge and sure about the profession, (iii) reduce financial burden, as we all know, the university
fees often the times aren’t cheap, and the scholarships are limited, so some students
decided to delay the application to university
in order to earning
money.
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earn
In
the other hand, after a long period of work, probably the employer will not give Change preposition
On
the
real recognition to the employee because they value people that Correct article usage
apply
also
have a certificate degree and not just the
practical experience, Correct article usage
apply
so
which means that one of the advantages can be the less academic recognition and limited theoretical knowledge. Correct word choice
apply
For
this
reason, attending university
become a must-have in some high-tech fields. In conclusion, young people are able to gain
the most practical technique during on-the-job training, although
there would be some challenges for them on the way to promotion at work.
However
, a lot of countries in
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at
the
present date encourage Correct article usage
apply
students
to enroll
in work-based training in summer or winter in order to Change the spelling
enrol
gain
a practical technique. In my opinion, from a career point of view
I think that Add a comma
,view
gain
professional experience before attend
Change the verb form
attending
the
Correct article usage
apply
university
have
more pros than cons. Correct subject-verb agreement
has
Although
, is important to remember that ever
decision depends on the circumstances and the Correct your spelling
every
long term
goal of each Add a hyphen
long-term
individuals
.Change to a singular noun
individual
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