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In the future all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside this vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

#future #cars #buses #trucks #driverless #people #vehicles #passengers
Presently, most
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the
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vehicles are controlled by humans.
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drive
 automobiles,
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advantages
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 of
this
 phenomenon will outweigh the
disadvantages
. To comments
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 the
disadvantages
, the most concerning issue of driverless
cars
 is,
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 will make millions of
drivers
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 job less. Particularly in some industries like tracking, taxi,
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and ride
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ride sharing
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, where driving is the primary occupation of people, with the introduction of
this
technology
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 many people will be jobless. Which will affect on countries economy
as well as
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internal politics. As those vehicles will run by software, advanced
system
 and
internet
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thus
, some
bad
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 intended people will be able to control
cars
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system
it
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 would be dangerous for internal security.
However
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 the advantages will be more significant than
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the disadvantages
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. Nowadays, most
accident
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caused
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 by human errors.
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, human has feelings and emotions so not all the time they can be attentive
while
 driving,
that is
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drink
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 and
drive
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 is prohibited in every country but many drivers
does
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 not follow the rules
and
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in
a
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research by
Indian
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road
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 and safety department it is found that drink and
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 caused 26% collision in 2016.
Wheres
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self
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drive
cars
 will
controlled
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 by advanced technology software and
calculated
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a calculated
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system
 where thousands of sensors
raders
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radars
readers
traders
automatic
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 and
improved
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breaking
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system
 will make
the
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traveling
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more
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safer.
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, despite the
disadvantages
,
advantages
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the advantages
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 are more significant and beneficial for all human beings.
Diveless
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Driverless
cars
 will be able to save more lives and
passangers
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passengers
 will feel
more
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safer during travelling not only that
,
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 but
also
the
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driverless
cars
has
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 the ability to boost a country's economy by making citizens more productive.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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