The chart shows smartphone penetration in Chile 2015-2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart shows smartphone penetration in Chile 2015-2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given bar chart provides the proportion of
change
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in
smartphone
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users and
proportion
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the proportion
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of
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the populantion
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populantion
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population
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,
number
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a number
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of
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user
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users
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was shown in terms of
million
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. In 2020 ,
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smartphone
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user
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was more in number .
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it was at
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lowest in 2015
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for 7.1
million
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. On the
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hand,
proportion
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the proportion
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of
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population
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the population
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is 56.8 % in the
year
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2020 .
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, 40.7 % in the
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2015 . More specifically ,total
smartphone
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user
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users
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,
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percentage
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the percentage
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change
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in
smartphoneuser
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smartphone user
and
finally
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percentage
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of
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population
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the population
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are flexible from 2015 to 2020 . In 2016 ,
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population
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the population
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was 5 % more than
2015
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the 2015
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population
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which is 45.0 % .
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contradicts ,
quantity
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the quantity
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of
smart phone
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smartphone
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user
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users
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was 7.1
million
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in 2015 and 7.9
million
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in 2016 respectively ,which was 0.8
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units
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less than the previous
year
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.
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, In 2020 total number of
smartphone
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user
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users
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was 10.3
million
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or their
percentage
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of
population
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was 56.8 %.
Whereas
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, the
percentage
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change
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of mobile
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user
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users
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was 4.9 % .
To conclude
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, the
percentage
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change
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in
smartphone
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user
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users
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is more in
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year
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2017
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for 9.4 % .
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the
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addition , it was low in 2020
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for 4.9 % .
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words change, smartphone, user, million, population, year, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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