The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart gives information about graduates and postgraduates of the UK who did not go into full-
time
work
did
after leaving college in 2008. The data is measured in numbers for both graduate and postgraduate Unnecessary verb
apply
students
.
Overall
, it is clear that
the number of further
study
students
of the UK graduates of
possessed the leading position Change preposition
apply
while
that for past time
and unemployment students
was lower than further
students
There were
Change the verb form
was
substantial
increase of Add an article
a substantial
the substantial
further
study
and part
Add a hyphen
part-time
time
work
students
of the UK postgraduates, while
voluntary work
was the least considerable in the group.
Looking at the details, the index of further
study
graduate students
experienced a substantial rise with almost 30.000, while
it was almost tripled of
the same figure for voluntary Change preposition
by
work
students
. The figure for unemployment and part
Add a hyphen
part-time
time
work
students
were over 16 and 17 accordingly
.
The index of past
Add a hyphen
past-time
time
work
students
12.5
Add a missing verb
was 12.5
students
almost as high as the same figure for further
study
(2.725) The number of unemployed postgraduate students
(1.625) was considerably higher than that voluntary
Change preposition
of voluntary
work
(345).Submitted by moxinurabjalilova on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, students, study, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "substantial" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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