The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.                                                                                                Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart gives information about graduates and postgraduates of the UK who did not go into full-
time
work
did
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after leaving college in 2008. The data is measured in numbers for both graduate and postgraduate
students
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the number of
further
study
students
of the UK graduates
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possessed the leading position
while
that for past
time
and unemployment
students
was lower than
further
students
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were
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substantial
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a substantial
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increase of
further
study
and
part
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part-time
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time
work
students
of the UK postgraduates,
while
voluntary
work
was the least considerable in the group. Looking at the details, the index of
further
study
graduate
students
experienced a substantial rise with almost 30.000,
while
it was almost tripled
of
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the same figure for voluntary
work
students
. The figure for unemployment and
part
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time
work
students
were over 16 and 17
accordingly
. The index of
past
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time
work
students
12.5
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students
almost as high as the same figure for
further
study
(2.725) The number of unemployed postgraduate
students
(1.625) was considerably higher than that
voluntary
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work
(345).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words work, students, study, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "substantial" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate/postgraduate students
  • full-time work
  • further study
  • part-time education
  • voluntary work
  • unemployment
  • travel/gap year
  • percentage/proportion
  • field of study
  • economic factors
  • trends
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • correlate
  • preferences
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