In some countries, university students study near their home and live with their family, while in others students have to study in another city. Do the advantages of living away from home outweigh the disadvantages?

It is quite common these days that the
life
of
students
when they study university. It is my belief that the positive effects of
this
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could certainly outweigh its disadvantages. There are several drawbacks for
students
when they live away from home. A common reason is that the
student
will not be taken
care
of by their family.
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, the
life
before the family
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taken
care
student
such
as
:
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meal
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meals
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and
drink
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, clothes,etc, but when the
student
away
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from the
house
then
the
student
will not be taken
care
of by the family. Another negative aspect can be that
students
must
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for
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their
life
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and balance about
learn
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.
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, because learning away from the
house
then
just only alone and nobody cares and take
care
for
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them
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the
student
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must take
care
of
themselvesself
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themselves
. It will make them think too much about meals and drinks, housework, study,etc so
students
must balance it logically.
However
, in spite of these negative effects, living away from a
house
can bring about important benefits. One obvious advantage is that the children will learn independence.
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, the
student
will
independent
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on
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finance, living time,etc
this
is a
virtural
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virtual
good and necessary for people. Another positive effect is that learning way from,
students
more and more develop your self.
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, each place will have a different environment so the
student
will learn knowledge too much to help
student
development . In conclusion,
although
the
student
learns the way from the
house
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many
negative
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, it is obvious that it
also
has more
positive
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. My view is that the problem
student
learns away from a
house
can bring about more benefits than harm.
Submitted by yeshomeclass on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Independence
  • Life skills
  • Broaden horizons
  • Cultural exposure
  • Network
  • Loneliness
  • Homesickness
  • Adaptability
  • Financial burden
  • Student debt
  • Academic responsibilities
  • Social freedoms
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