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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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In
present
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 world owning a
house
 is quite an achievement for many
people
 and taking
this
 into account in
few
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a few
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 nations many of them are willing to have
one
to
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for
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 themselves rather than
renting
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rent
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. There are many reasons that fall into
the
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consideration to move ahead with
this
 initiative and that being said is a very positive phenomenon. Having an own
house
 improves self-confidence. Inflation
effected
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affected
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 many sectors in the world and housing is
one
 among them. Mortgages over few years have spiralled exponentially in
such
 a way that it became almost impossible to rent a
house
 in a peaceful community.
In addition
 to that Banks have
also
 increased their interest rates in order to survive the crisis market, which in turn gravely affected the housing market. Taking all these into consideration many
people
 are willing to keep or own a
house
 rather than renting
one
. To add to
this
,
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individual's approach has
also
 changed towards rentals from
couple
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a couple
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 of years.
People
 usually are not preferring it because
,
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 there will be someone
up
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with
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 whom they should address
to about
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the problems of the
house
instead
 of fixing them on their own. To support
this
, many families in India are willing to have their own
house
 only to escape from all these aforementioned problems. Separate
house
 in many countries
also
 resembles their status in
the
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society. Many communities believe that owning
a
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apply
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property is essential to put themselves in the respected category of
the
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society. It
also
 replicates their attitude and behaviour.
For instance
, a study revealed that
people
 who have
a
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their
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 own
house
 has
different
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a different
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 and
confident
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more confident
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 approach towards any problems than
who
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those who
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 are not which clearly depicts
the
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human psychology.
Furthermore
,
People
 can indulge
their
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in their
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 life without any tension if they own
a
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apply
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property as it reminds them that they have achieved something in their life to cheer about.
To sum up
,
public
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the public
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 in many countries feel like it is far more imperative to own a
house
 rather than
renting
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rent
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one
 and the factors like inflation, increased interest rates and
unwilling
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unwillingness
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 to accept
lanlords
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landlords
 are
few
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a few
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 reasons. Though there might be many reasons to oppose
this
but
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in the end, it is very beneficial for an individual rather than
setback
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a setback
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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