some people think that more money should be spent on developing public transportation, others believe that, instead we should spend this money in enhancing the roads Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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below, about developing the public
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developing the
road
lanes. We will discuss
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views and will provide my
concern
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developing
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public
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grows
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,
people
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, and they are in a
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position
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vehicles
.
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that
people
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public
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. The major
concern
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using own
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leads to air pollution.
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public
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,
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the air that we breathe.
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, we may face climate changes in the future.
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that we are encountering today is
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road
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inevitable.
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in the roads.
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the
road
are becoming more horrible and very worst conditions, and it will have
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miserable experience driving during these
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. Considering
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this
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repairs the
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,
due to
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we may reduce
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road
accidents in future.
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road
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into that whether they are working properly in
both
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road
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and
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signals
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roads
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. In
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conculsion
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conclusion
, the
government
should invest money in
both
public
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and enhancing the
road
.
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will avoid
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unnecessary
road
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climatic change in the future, and avoid
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air pollution. My
concern
over here is, I will be supporting
both
the points that we have discussed here. Because
,
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developing
the
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public
vehicles
and repairing the roads are connected to
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of the
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in the country.
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