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The graph bbelow shows the amount of waste produced by three companies over a period 15 years

The graph bbelow shows the amount of waste produced by three companies over a period 15 years
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The given data illustrates the
comparission
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comparison
 of three
campanies
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companies
 in terms of their
waste
 output between 2000 and 2015. The given wastes
measured
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 in
tonnes
.
Overall
, there were significant changes in the amounts of
waste
 produced by all three
companies
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shown
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 on the graph.
While
companies
 A and
B
 saw
waste
 output all over the
15 year
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15-year
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 period, the amount of
waste
 produced by
company
C
 slightly increased. In 200,
company
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Company
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 A produced 12
tonnes
 of
waste
while
companies
B
 and
C
 produced approximately 8
tonnes
 and 4
tonnes
 of
waste
 material respectively. Over the following 5 years, the
waste
 output of both
companies
B
 and
C
 rose by
aound
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around
 2
tonnes
,
while
 the figure for
company
 A tell by about 1 tonne. From 2005 to 2015,
company
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Company
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 A decreased
waste
 production by roughly 3
tonnes
, and
company
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Company
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B
 reduced
amount
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the amount
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 of
waste
 by around 7
tonnes
,
however
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,however
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company
c
 save
increasing
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an increasing
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 trend till the end of the period and increased
almost
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by almost
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 4
tonnes
. By the end of 2015,
company
C
 had risen to 10
tonnes
,
while
 amounts of
waste
 from
companies
 A and
B
 had dropped to 8
tonnes
 and 3
tonnes
.
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