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In many countries traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. This has adverse effects on families, individuals and the society. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion

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21st century is becoming very popular especially
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 industry so notions of traditional foods are ignored
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 they pay more attention to fast
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. And
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 new type of
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 can cause adverse every aspect. I completely disagree with
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 idea. First of all, People are becoming lazy more and more all over the world thanks to modern life, they do not want to spend their time cooking a meal
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 they chose the easy way.
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, Fast
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 is the faster meal to cook so many populations before going to work, university, or
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 buy
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 type of
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 enjoy eating it on the way and it often can cause negative effects on their healthy especially
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 as obesity.
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, the number of patients increase in the world so both governments and families became spending money on drugs or losing weight.
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, let me begin to look at the second disadvantage of eating fast
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. Despite it is not a natural
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 itself consumption is famous around the globe and when older age people eat fast
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 they are not able to digest it
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 it could be reason problems in the stomach and in the end maybe even finished in death.
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, fast
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 may influence to increase in industry,
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, farmers grow up lots of vegetables, of course, to sell our notion if people stop buying vegetables from markets industry become drop
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 may Dissatisfaction result. By way of my conclusion, l once again reaffirm my position.
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 to say, it has some demerits and merits to eating fast
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instead
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 of traditional
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