The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar graph illustrates the owning and renting habitats in

percentage

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the percentage

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of British and Welsh families in 1918 compared with 2011.

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, as the chart showed, the

residences

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renting had touched a high percentage in 1918 and it had fallen down steeply by

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time.

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, the percentage of British and Welsh owners had been rising up since 1918 ,and it was at its peak by 2001.

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reputation

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renting accommodation seemed to be popular in 1918 at almost 80 % of households

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its

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favored

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had decreased respectively around 5 decades when its bar was identically at

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same level as people who owned houses at five-tenth. Meanwhile, the number of owning residences rose sharply against renters.

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, some citizens would agree that buying a house is more worth than renting which they can not be an owner themself.

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some people prefer

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others have no reason to buy a house and think that owning houses is expensive

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unaffordable.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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3 paragraphs

168 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

predominant
accommodation
trend
shift
households
homeownership
economic and social circumstances
interwar period
post-World War II
government policies
urbanization
public policy
economic prosperity
tipping point

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