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The pie charts below show the different reasons for flight delays in a particular Asian country in 2015 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the different reasons for flight delays in a particular Asian country in 2015 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following chart demonstrates the different factors for airport delays, in a specific Asian country, in the years 2015 and 2016.
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, we can see that airline operations management was the leading cause of delays for both years recorded, with 40% in 2015, and 46% in 2016. Meanwhile, airport security saw the biggest increase in delays from
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, air traffic control witnessed a significant drop in percentage. When looking specifically at airport management and security, we can visualise from the chart a 6% and 9% rise respectively in interruptions between the years studied.
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, air traffic control saw a significant drop of 13% in the same time frame.
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, we can interpret from the data that bad weather as a cause remained relatively stable, with only a 2% rise from 2015 to 2016. In comparison, military causes saw a 4% drop
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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