Topic: Student should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

To achieve a goal of study, academic
subjects
must be prepared for
students
to succeed in
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.
On the other hand
, Some practical aspects are not required the same
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academic ability in facing
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. Prioritising academic
subjects
is a must considering not all
students
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readiness for various
subjects
.
However
, there is another side
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the route of
students
towards their career
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. In
this
essay, I will elaborate more below. On the one hand, many academic
subjects
are provided in the school,
as a result
, the
students
will not be able to manage the topics which are predicted to appear in
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. In
this
case, teachers would give them
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tricks to easily address the questions given in order to accomplish it.
Moreover
,
students
are usually keen on
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practical activities
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do not feel
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while
doing
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exam
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. They just need to improve their skills by themselves because the skills have been experienced
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them,
such
as watching youtube and other methods.
This
is certainly different with academic
subjects
which do not appeal
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students
.
On the other hand
, sharpening the skill which
students
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will be beneficial for them.
For example
, if they want to be
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later, schools must expose them towards what they love to do,
in other words
, they do not require to
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succeed
in academic
subjects
to achieve their career.
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, they would accelerate their career as
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if the curriculums support the related knowledge. In conclusion,
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sufficient preparation in class to deal with
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, the skills
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student needs for their future plan must be prioritised.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Balanced education
  • Real-world application
  • Holistic development
  • Self-reliance
  • Intellectual development
  • Well-rounded individuals
  • Critical thinking
  • Practical problem-solving
  • Future preparedness
  • Adaptability
  • Social and emotional benefits
  • Self-confidence
  • Fostering independence
  • Mental health
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