The money spent by governments on space programs would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some governments

spent

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spend

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their budget on space projects

although

it is believed that subsidizing public services like educational and medical services is a priority. I strongly agree with

this

idea. On the one hand, the

government

should first support the fundamental parts of each society by funding them.

For instance

, schools with the

government

’s

finance

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finances

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can improve the educational facilities

such

as intelligent boards and projectors;

moreover

, schools’ administrators get the power to refurbish shabby parts of their centres.

Additionally

, with

government

funding, hospitals as one of the basic parts of each country can be well-equipped with the latest medical equipment;

therefore

, illnesses can be supplied with high-quality treatments.

Besides

, enough budget can give the opportunity

of establishing

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modern medical centres in remote areas.

On the other hand

government

spending on programs like space and launching shuttles is predominantly for showing off. In fact, they cost a fortune to show their power;

moreover

, it is very likely to

be failed

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fail

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since it is a complicated science and needs a great deal of knowledge and financial

sources

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resources

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for conducting research.

Hence

many countries, particularly developing of which with low levels of information and wealth can lose plenty of their national cash.

In addition

such

spending is not beneficial for the public that needs to be provided with their essential needs like educational and medical services.

To sum up

while

the

government

can use its authority to take advantage of itself, it is much better to behave in a logical way to bring wealth and prosperity to society.

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Relevant & specific examples

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256 words

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