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In a cashless society, people use more credit cards. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this phenomenon?

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In
this
 modern era,
people
 used to use
credit
cards
 rather than using
cash
 for buying items, but in the
past
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 there was no chance to get rid of using
cash
 and
people
 were carrying several
cash
 in their pockets and exposing themselves to
thiefs
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thieves
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. There are numerous benefits
of for
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to
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 using
credit
cards
.
Firstly
,
credit
cards
 give the owner more safety than holding
cash
.
For example
,
people
 who use
credit
cards
 are more secure because it requires a password to access
your
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their
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 money.
Secondly
,
credit
cards
 now are more fascinating and It is highly recommended for
traveling
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travelling
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due to
its
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their
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 ability to transform one currency to another foreign country
by
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with
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 just a few clicks.
For instance
, without using a
credit
 card, it is compulsory to transfer local
cash
 to foreign
cash
 for purchase but with the use of
credit
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a credit
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card
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,card
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this
 obstacle has been tackled.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks that could affect the reputation of using
credit
cards
.
Credit
cards
 lack control of spending and it can surprise the owner
as a consequence
 of its usability,
such
 as if you go to a shop and just scan your phone for every purchase.
Furthermore
,
credit
 card technology requires
an
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the
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internet
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Internet
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 to work and without it would not have the accessibility to our
credit
cards
. In conclusion, it is true that there are several advantages of using
credit
cards
 and there are more benefits
especially
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 in
this
 modern era,
however
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people
 are still facing some drawbacks of
this
 type of technology.
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