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In a cashless society, people use more credit cards. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this phenomenon?

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In
this
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 modern era,
people
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 used to use
credit
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cards
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 rather than using
cash
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 for buying items, but in the
past
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 there was no chance to get rid of using
cash
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 and
people
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 were carrying several
cash
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 in their pockets and exposing themselves to
thiefs
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thieves
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. There are numerous benefits
of for
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 using
credit
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cards
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.
Firstly
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,
credit
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cards
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 give the owner more safety than holding
cash
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.
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,
people
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 who use
credit
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cards
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 are more secure because it requires a password to access
your
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their
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 money.
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,
credit
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cards
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 now are more fascinating and It is highly recommended for
traveling
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due to
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its
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their
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 ability to transform one currency to another foreign country
by
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with
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 just a few clicks.
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, without using a
credit
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 card, it is compulsory to transfer local
cash
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 to foreign
cash
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 for purchase but with the use of
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credit
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a credit
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card
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,card
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this
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 obstacle has been tackled.
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, there are some drawbacks that could affect the reputation of using
credit
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cards
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.
Credit
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cards
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 lack control of spending and it can surprise the owner
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 of its usability,
such
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 as if you go to a shop and just scan your phone for every purchase.
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,
credit
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 card technology requires
an
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the
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internet
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Internet
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 to work and without it would not have the accessibility to our
credit
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cards
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. In conclusion, it is true that there are several advantages of using
credit
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cards
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 and there are more benefits
especially
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 in
this
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 modern era,
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however
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people
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 are still facing some drawbacks of
this
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 type of technology.
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